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Essay grammer any mistakes? - Badplum - Oct 21, 2014 In ELA I need to make an essay comparing the maze runner book to the movie. I want to make sure that I have as few grammer errors as possible. You dont need to watch the movie (that was terrible) to help me, I would just appreciate it if someone could point out any grammer issues I made. Thanks in advance! 😁 (I dont expect anyone will want to read this but if you do Id greatly appreciate it xD ) Code Alby is different in The Maze Runner book and in the movie. Although in both the movie and book Alby is one of the most interesting characters. He has his similarities from the book and his differences from the movie. There are few similarities with Alby in the book and in the movie The Maze Runner. One similarity with Alby in the book and the film is that Alby liked Thomas from the beginning and to the end. He trusted him through out the book such as when Alby shot Ben to save Thomas in the book. Alby was very brave and selfless notably when he sacrificed himself to cause a distraction when Thomas was in the abyss to type in the code and when he told Tomas to escape the maze before his noble dead in the movie. He decided to sacrifice himself to save everyone in the book and film.* - Louis C.K. - Oct 21, 2014 Although in both the movie and book, Alby... There are a few similarities with Alby..... One similarity with Alby in the book and the film is that Alby liked Thomas from the beginning and to the end.======>One similarity is that...... or...... one similarity with Alby in both the book and the film... that Alby liked Thomas from the beginning and to the end.======> from the beginning to the end. He trusted him (throughout) the book such as when Alby shot Ben to save Thomas in the book. This sentence need editing, the pronoun are ambiguous. Alby was very brave and selfless notably when =====> Error in parallelism, and the sentence needs to be revise, maybe a comma?Is a run on sentence with 2 when. I got tired after the first paragraph. someone confirm these errors to help out op. GL man. * - Badplum - Oct 21, 2014 Thank you so much! Didnt know I had so many errors in the first paragraph. Im going to need to revise for more errors. * - Rivalry - Oct 22, 2014 Corrected and optimised to flow: Code Alby is presented differently in 'The Maze Runner' book and the movie, although in both the movie and the book Alby is one of the most interesting characters. He has his similarities from the book and his differences from the movie. Nevertheless, there are few similarities between Alby in the book and Alby in the movie. One similarity between Alby in the book and the film is that Alby liked Thomas from the beginning to the end; he trusted him throughout the book, such as when Alby shot Ben to save Thomas. Alby was very brave and selfless, notably when he sacrificed himself to cause a distraction when Thomas was in the abyss, allowing him to type in the code and escape the maze. Therefore Alby decided to sacrifice himself to save everyone in both the book and the film.I hope this helps! * - Trickstered - Oct 22, 2014 Adding to the previous ones, its grammar, not grammer. * - Badplum - Dec 8, 2014 okay thanks everyone I fixed a few more errors (I know this is a VERY late response) and I ended up getting an 88% soooo ya thanks |