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Another Rap Verse - BRΞNDΞN - Jul 18, 2017
I will get this shit recorded one day
Some days I listen to other rappers on YouTube
Listen to their stories and watch their headlines on the news
Then I open up my computer and try to see if I can write
Just like how they write, even if I know I'm a different type
Oh this song is brutal, cook me some ramen noodles
I don't have a pit but I think I can borrow a poodle
Oh this song is sad and about how his family died
My family's alive and my life's fine, I'm doing alright
But some times I wish had something super bad happen to me
Because songs become better when you add a little tragedy
I wish I had an alter-ego or a crazy ex girlfriend I want to kill
I wish I had a bitch of a mother and an addiction to pills
Why do I live in a nice house, yeah I know it is the hood
But I'm white and can do anything other whites could
I graduated, and in school I was always constantly hated
So I sat in my room with my laptop and chronically masturbated
Why the fuck is there nothing really special about me?
Every rapper before has done something negative or positively
I'am neutrality and honestly nothing to be proud of
My only good songs were in Amerigone, now I'm washed up
Oh and my name, how the fuck can Americunt garner me fame?
Just for having the word in it, people don't look at me the same
Oh but if you're a wacko and illiterate people licking your asshole
But if you're nerdy and white listening to my shit's a hassle
What if I put on a ritz and painted my face fucking black
Then said nigga in every fucking song until I hated every track
Then get hated on by every black rapper because I said the n word
But hey at least being a racist prick got my fucking music heard
Now I'am sorry to those people who actually listen to what I make
Because I'm not like you, and sorry that you can't relate
But the sad part, is that you all call mumble shit art
Then analyze everything I write, and tear me apart?
* - prada ⠀ - Jul 18, 2017
You can't expect us to create a cadence ourselves. I'll never understand it- showcase it as poetry not music.
Also, try to experiment with other rhyme schemes. Find a beat to flow it over, write it bit by bit.
* - GrandpaSherman - Jul 18, 2017
Yeah it doesn't sound good to the cadence I tried ":9 can't wait to hear your recording of it
* - DeepBay - Jul 19, 2017
Put it in a simple sound data and release it.
Looks good.
* - glitchgxd - Jul 19, 2017
You should just get a headset and record into it or a cheap mic. Quality doesn't have to be incredible (though it helps), but at least then we'd have an idea of how it's supposed to flow.
* - fnatic440 - Jul 19, 2017
lyrics are actually ok. Not bad. Kind of original; you went a different route.
* - BRΞNDΞN - Jul 19, 2017
You guys are right, rhyme scheme drove me nuts.
I recorded, and rapped it a bit off beat. It sounds decent.
* - Adaptnesss - Jul 21, 2017
Wow, pretty good homedog with a berry on that bop.
* - Tro yeh - Jul 22, 2017
I really tried to rap it in a flow.
And it made a pretty good rap tho.
Nice one.
* - Mr. Robot - Jul 22, 2017
You should count your syllables.
* - BRΞNDΞN - Jul 22, 2017
(Jul 22, 2017 03:44 AM)Mr. Robot Wrote: You should count your syllables.
I admittedly hated trying to rap this but I made it work
* - Marky Mark - Aug 3, 2017
Youre priviledged
Quit bitching
you sound like a fag
who would get fucked up in prison
but of course then you had some better shit to right
but people like you haven't even been in a fight
i hate you
i kill you
i cremate you
and smoke you ashes
you will reincarnate into me
and ill get all the riches
youre the type who looks sad in family pictures
you think you bad
you fooken wot mate
this is youre dad
and ill give you a stab
just like i cut up you mother son
fuck with me and you'll be well done
don't you see what is a steak
when you make the type of comments you make
you're a real fake
and its time to die
so say goodbye
* - Marky Mark - Aug 3, 2017
Youre priviledged
Quit bitching
you sound like a fag
who would get fucked up in prison
but of course then you had some better shit to right
but people like you haven't even been in a fight
i hate you
i kill you
i cremate you
and smoke you ashes
you will reincarnate into me
and ill get all the riches
youre the type who looks sad in family pictures
you think you bad
you fooken wot mate
this is youre dad
and ill give you a stab
just like i cut up you mother son
fuck with me and you'll be well done
don't you see what is a steak
when you make the type of comments you make
you're a real fake
and its time to die
so say goodbye