Yes, it's a valid haiku, but it confuses me greatly and scares me slightly.
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Jul 28, 2015 08:09 AM
(This post was last modified: Jul 28, 2015 08:10 AM by Notorious™.)
(Jul 28, 2015 07:55 AM)Mouse❤️ Wrote: Yes, it's a valid haiku, but it confuses me greatly and scares me slightly. I see time fading; I'm approaching nirvana; I love you Ana. I gave mine a second try, do you prefer my first one or this one? The quieter you are, the more you are able to hear.
Nobody dies a virgin, life fucks us all.
Jul 28, 2015 08:25 AM
(This post was last modified: Jul 28, 2015 08:45 AM by Notorious™.)
Just writing whatever came to my mind at the time, it is really difficult to express feelings in 3 such small sentences.
Here is my last haiku: The void is my home; All I feel is emptiness; She leaves me speechless. The quieter you are, the more you are able to hear.
Nobody dies a virgin, life fucks us all. (Jul 28, 2015 08:25 AM)Notorious™ Wrote: Just writing whatever came to my mind at the time, it is really difficult to express feelings in 3 such small sentences. Spelling speechless correctly might help your odds. (Jul 28, 2015 08:46 AM)Notorious™ Wrote: I'm sorry for not having an excellent grammar, English isn't my native language, although I try to improve. No hard feelings, just wanted you to correct it so it wouldn't hinder your chances of acceptance. 
Jul 28, 2015 09:24 AM
(This post was last modified: Jul 28, 2015 09:25 AM by Happeh.)
The lack of creativity is outstanding.
Btw, if you need help I made a thread on haiku: https://hackforums.net/showthread.php?tid=4381323 (Jul 28, 2015 09:24 AM)Happeh Wrote: The lack of creativity is outstanding. It seems as though people are revolving around sadness as their subject material lol, very repetitive. It is like they are trying TOO hard to be deep. |
